[LustrousDragon]

That's something to ear from Yui

[Neverarine]

i am glad you all enjoyed the poem, when i wrote it i wasn't sure if it would be even any good, espcially since i was having a rough week, and i tend to be overlycritical of myself

[LustrousDragon]

Here's a tip: When writing a poem, think outside the box. What I mean is, as a poet myself, I tend to think about personifications and hyperboles rather than just simple similes and metaphors.

[LeythonX]

Or when your outside the box, write about the box... it might be an interesting poem

[LustrousDragon]

Such understanding is using exaggerating terms of terminology and technical expressing of oneself and the truth of the inside, not just by jotting down words of outside...

...Gosh I sounded like a university professor...

[Neverarine]

i now have another poem written from the need to have a release. though i don't think this one is nearly as good as my other one...

Dust
A wall from the right
Cast away from the light
The moon creeps through night
Colors fade and die
Wondering forever why

Dust sifts through the rafters
Wolves lament to brothers
Loons mourn their harbors
The owl serenades the mouse
To leave his house

Time waits for no man
Yet we still demand
This is getting out of hand
A moth falls from the flame
The reaper has another to claim

I see stars in the lake
They should leave before their late
The water is cold, but so is fate
I take one last glance
Then I take my chance

Why do I not cry?
Am I not about to die?
I only wanted one last try
I feel the cold ground embracing me
Here a shall lie, for a time

[razzy]

Wow lovely poem.
Yeah life is a bitch so make the most of it! =3

[zain]

that is pretty good